My Best Friend in My Life
My
Best Friend in My Life
My best friend is Adi
Purwa Sedana. He was my classmate when we were in senior high school in
Denpasar. He is a good friend. Sometimes we spend our time to have fun
together, such as fishing in Serangan island, playing guitar, and going
somewhere together. He has same hobby as me. Our hobby is playing guitar. He
has good personality and good physical that make me so happy become his friend.
He has some good
personalities that I really like as his best friend. The first, he is a kind
person. Sometimes when we want to go out together, he picks me up, and treats
me some foods. The second is helpful. He always helps me when I get some
troubles. He always helps his friends even though he is busy. He can break
every single activity that he has to help his friends. The last is humorist. He
always makes a joke to make his friends laugh very loud.
He has good physical
that makes him very cool. His height is about 165cm. His body is shorter than
me. Even though his body is shorter than me, he has solid body. He always does
physical exercises in a gym center near his house to build his body. He has
short hair, sharp nose, and light complexion that make him very cool.
Adi is one of my best
friends in my life. He is a kind person. He always help me and make me happy.
He has good physical that make him very cool. I hope we can be best friend
forever.
4 comments:
Nice writing Sakti, but you have to pay attention with the mechanic of "he picks me up, and treats me some foods." You dont need to add comma before and.
Beside that, your restate statement is not a sentence.
hmm, when you type "he picks me up, and treats me some foods", you don't need to add comma before and.
you writing is good, but you should learn again about how to use a punctuation.
nice writing sakti,
i agree with astri and tika
but so far is good :D
keep writing dude
Well sakti, I have read your story and it's good actually. But I suggest you to tell more about your friends. Your grammar is good enough, but I found a mistake there.
Look at the third sentence at the last paragraph, "He always help me and make me happy". You should make it like this "He always helps me and makes me happy." Because the subject is "he", the verb should follow by -s or -es.
Thanks for your post anyway. Keep writing :)
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